Peer Review #5 – American Literature

Hi Jamie,
Interesting poem you have created here. There are some good lines in the piece, but I feel some of the images don’t fit together well. I think they either need to be consistent with the simile structure or not use so many. Perhaps if you condense it to an image per stanza and turned some of the similes into metaphors, this would provide a stronger image. Also, some of the pop culture references could be stronger.
Cheers,
Brendon

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